#revise — Public Fediverse posts

"If you want truly to understand something, try to change it." — ​Kurt Lewin — — — #KurtLewin #quote #quotes #understand #examine #change #revise #dismantle #alter #comprehend #knowledge

#AntiDrag #ordinances in three #Iowa #cities are #unconstitutional, argues #ACLUOfIowa

The ACLU sent #letters to #Dyersville, #Pella and #Waukee #advising them to #revise their #ordinances #restricting #dragshows because they are #unconstitutional

#Women #Transgender #LGBTQ #LGBTQIA #Iowa #Entertainment #Drag #DragQueens #Representation #Culture #RepublicanParty #Hate #Bigotry #Violence #Genocide #Discrimination #Homophobia #Transphobia #ThePartyOfHate

https://littlevillagemag.com/drag-ordinances-in-three-iowa-cities-are-unconstitutional-argues-aclu-of-iowa/

There's never been a more critical time to support our #independent museum.

We're busier than ever, but can't get it done without more help. If you can, please consider backing us at https://www.patreon.com/museumofportablesound for as little as US$1/month to help us:

#Digitize our Physical Objects;
#Reinstall our Permanent Collection of #Sounds;
and #Revise our extensive Gallery Guide book!

#Collections #Museum #MuseumWork #MuseumOfPortableSound #SupportUs #IndependentMuseum

Here's some #writingAdvice: Create a list of problem words that flag problems in your writing as you #revise. Here's my list of #hedgeWords and #weaselWords.

(Reply with yours! I'll add them. Boost to share with others.)

• about (as in approximately)
• almost
• “and” conjunction run-ons. Could you break that sentence into two and save the conjunction?
• already
• barely
• begin
• “but” conjunction run-ons. Could you break that sentence and two and still provide the same contrast?
• can (in the sense of maybe)
• certainly
• generally
• I/he saw that (If the act of observation is paramount, don’t remove, don't remove such constructions.)
• I/he heard that
• I/he read that
• I/he felt that
• I/he noticed that
• I/he recognized that
• just
• kind of
• like
• maybe
• mostly
• near (in the sense of almost)
• of course
• one (in the sense of quantity when stating such is unnecessary)
• one (as a pronoun—generally sounds bad)
• perhaps
• possibly
• potentially (in the sense of maybe)
• probably
• really (the interject
• seems
• some (in the sense of indeterminate)
• sort of
• start, started to
• still
• surprisingly
• that (a latinate construction that can often be omitted when used to introduce a subordinate clause, but not always. Comprehension is paramount.)
• usually
• you can (verb)

My biggest bugaboos are words that soften (hedge) the impact of a sentence or keep the narrator from (weaselly) committing to action. Both kill effective narration, as the narrator knows all tells what's necessary. Careful, though. Such word mimic normal speech, as between subordinate and dominant people and in cautious conversation.

When you find these words, stop and examine the context of the word.

• Does the word serve a purpose? If not, delete. I suggest removing it provisionally; this makes it clear.
• Can a strong word substitute? If, substitute.
• Is something lost if the word, phrase, or sentence is removed? If not, delete.
• Can a previous sentence imply what this one does? (Ellipsis)
• Will recasting the sentence clarify or strength the it?

A good list should transform your prose, turning hesitancy to decisive action. Deleting these words removes verbiage, making your writing concise and hard-edged. Each and every word must serve a purpose, whether functional or aesthetic.

#boostingIsSharing

#amRevising #writing #fiction #writingLife